By Abhidnya Bhave
As the wind blew
and the dandelion petals flew,
I only kept thinking
and could do nothing.
There was rather something wrong with me,
I kept thinking about it under the tamarind tree.
I heard the birds chirping on it,
and the little ones squealing as they fleet.
I could see on the ground,the water spout,
but this strange feeling, I couldn't figure it out.
Then I saw, and noticed the birds happy with their offsprings,
As they together, to fly, opened their wings.
Then I realised, the cause of this emptiness,
Was nothing, but just loneliness
Stupid poem. Not good at all. U will forever be empty n lonely . Do not write such dumb nonsense poem and publish on this site. Therr are people better than u who write better poems about important things, not like u writing about selfish things. Poem does not even rhyme n makes no sense just like your life. Bad poetry, not worthy of being on our site
This poem just brings out the fact that loneliness creates the emptiness and not vice versa. I think the poet himself is empty. I would like to let him know that his emptiness is infact an outcome of his isolation. Beautiful masterpiece! God bless you.
Thank you!
Nice work! Abhidnya
Nice lines and nice rhyme work. You cut a nice poem!
Brilliant !
Thank you everyone! I’m glad :)
Really well written and wonderful poetry.
Nicely written. Beautiful expression and very rich vocabulary. Keep writing.
Beautiful ! I felt it….
Amazing one…
Simple and clear….looking ahead for more from you….keep going.
Simple and clear….looking ahead for more from you….keep going.
Very nice
Keep It up dear
So nicely put. The thing about loneliness is that you cannot describe it, though it is all consuming. You just expressed it so well.